I think marriage is important company but selection a partner is more important.In this point, there are some problems.For example marriage somebody from other country.
In my opinion marriage somebody from another country can be cause of some problems. First problem is language problem.Language is very important step in marriage.language difference affects partner's communication ans so this situation damages marriage. Second problem is opinion difference so this can affect badly marriage.the last problem and the most important problem is culture difference.I think our expectations, our opinions, our styles are different.All this problems damage company of marriage.Yes marriage somebody from another country has some problems but i think it has some good sides too.For example marriage somebody from another country can help us for culture exchange and so we can understand each others.
I think marriage somebody from another is unnecessary because there are a lot of people to marry.We dont need to import a partner to marry.
Written by :Mehmet Aktaş
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Dear Mehmet,
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Look at the following text and find out these in parantheses ( ). Having spotted all these errors, get some more peer (friend) feedback and rewrite it. All the best luck.
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"I think marriage is (an) important company but selection (of) a partner is more important.In this point, there are some problems (such as)For example marriage (marrying) somebody from (an)other country.
In my opinion (marriage somebody) from another country can (be cause of some)cause problems. The (f)First problem is language problem.Language is (a) very important step in marriage.language difference affects partner's communication ans so this situation damages marriage. (The) Second problem is opinion difference so this can affect ???badly marriage (badly).(T)the last problem and the most important problem is culture difference.I think our expectations, our opinions, our styles are different.All this problems damage (the structure-relations)company of marriage.Yes ???marriage somebody from another country has some problems but (I)i think it has some good sides too.For example ???marriage somebody from another country can help us for culture exchange and so we can understand each other(s). (no unity-no connections-the earlier points were related to negative but this one is a positive point)
I think marriage somebody from another is unnecessary because there are a lot of people to marry.We don't need to import a partner to marry."