What causes people to commit crime? Why do people need to commit crime? These are really important questions. We must think that these questions' answers.Crime ratings are getting increase by day by.In fact this situation has some reasons.
I think first reason is lack of education.Most of guilties are uneducated people because they don't know good or bad excatly. Uneducated people can commit crime easier than educated people because they need to learn good and bad so education is important.Thanks to education we can reduce crime ratings.
Second reason is psychological problems.Guilties who have some psychological problems are really common. In my opinion all guilties have some psychological problems because psychological problems push people to commit crime.Guilties who have some psychological problems, can continue to commit crime.If we want to stop them, they need to treat because of psychological problems.
Other reason can be friends or habits.It doesn't matter.Some people commit crime in some ways.If we educate them abou crime,we can reduce crime.I think education is important in this subject.
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Mehmet,
YanıtlaSilWatch out your errors in the following essay.
It looks good but you need to improve it by correcting the errors I specified in parantheses:
Mehmet wrote:
"What causes people to commit crime? Why do people need to commit crime? These are really important questions. We must think (of) an anwer to these questions ???that these questions' answers???.Crime ratings are (increasing) ????getting increase by day by??? day by day.In fact this situation has some reasons.
I think?? (The)first reason is lack of education.Most (criminals) ???of guilties are uneducated people because they don't know good or bad ex(act)ly. Uneducated people can commit crime easier(more easily) than educated people because they need to learn good and bad so education is important.Thanks to education we can reduce crime ratings.
The (s)Second reason is psychological problems.Guilties who have some psychological problems are really common. In my opinion all guilties have some psychological problems because psychological problems push people to commit crime.Guilties who have some psychological problems ??, can continue to commit crime.If we want to stop them, they need ???to treat(ment) because of psychological problems.
The (o)Other reason can be friends or habits.It doesn't matter.Some people commit crime in some ways.If we educate them abou(t) crime,we can reduce crime.I think education is important in this subject."
Dear Mehmet,
YanıtlaSilyou wrote an example of cause and effect essay here and it seems nice but i think there is a lot of grammatical mistakes. moreover, you should improve your essay, because it isn't enough to explain this subject.
A good essay but there are some grammatical mistakes. And I think it can be better with more details
YanıtlaSilhi man u r topic and u r feelings re good but there re grammetical mistakes for example not by day by the correct for is : day by day and also We must think that these questions' answers.in that sentence "that" is useless...and some other mistakes but i think while u re writing it u r mind is good...:D :D :D i made just a joke man :D :D thanks for u r essay........
YanıtlaSilAs ender said, there are some mistakes such as by day by.I think it is wrong. --We must think that these questions' answers-- in this sentence, you used "that" but it is useless. In addition, your essay doesn't include conclusion exactly, because you wrote one of the body paragraphs and conclusion together. you can improve your essay.
YanıtlaSilhi mehmet;
YanıtlaSilyour essay is good but i think you must be upgrade it. specially you must give more information about your topic on body paragraph. and there are some grammatical mistakes. but it's good. well done :)